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Monday, October 30, 2006

Why I major in Business Administration

I have studied BA for almost two years and am going to graduate. To retrospect the reasons why I choose this subject, it was a long story.

As soon as I graduated from junior high school, I enrolled in a business school, National Taipei College of Business. That means I hardly touched other major in the rest of my life. My parents are typical businessmen having a small restaurant. During my learning age, what I've learned from them are business ways of earning money, so I thought I aspired to be an artful businessman. Though I found I really want to be a veterinarian few years later, everything was too late. After five years studying in business, business-relative subjects seem to be my only choose. This is why I step in the field.

The second reason is that I failed in my transfer exam. I tried to major in Finance (those are two different subjects.) But some ridiculous things happened sequentially. What I’m about to tell is all truth. I attended only three schools transfer exams. First one is National Taipei University (NTPU). I was really stupid enough to fill my answers into wrong blanks and was punished by 50 scores! Second one is National Cheng Kung University (NCKU). The day before the exam, there was a big fight between my brother-in-law's and my family. I had mediated their argument until the morning, then rushed to Tainan without sleeping. No matter how much coffee I drank that day, I still fall asleep during the test. The last school is National Chengchi University (NCCU). When the test was about to beginning, I found I left my test certification at home. I rushed back to get it and late for my test. It made me nervous during the period of test. The rest is a history, I failed the three exams.

The last and the most influential reason is that if we wanted to study in NTUST, we could only choice Business Administration department. There wasn’t any alternative in this school. However, before making a decision, I checked the faculty and curriculum on the internet and I found the department is a good launching pad to my coveted Finance. Not only did it include extensive courses, but you could still choice one of the theme of monograph and research what you’re interested in. Teachers here have practice experience. Take my financial management teacher, Mr. Shie, for example, he was a former CFO of CLSA (香港里昂證券). This was a big attraction for me, so I registered.

All in all, I am still glad of majoring in Business Administration. I deeply believe that I will study harder to major in what I really want and be more competitive in the future.

3 comments:

MINA said...

此篇內容結構大致為:
第一段:主要敘述 ”why I step in the field.”
第二段:轉學考的悲慘經歷
第三段:進入台科企管系
結論:I really want and be more competitive in the future.

在看完後有以下建議:
A.此篇題目是:”Why I major in Business Administration” ,而作者以敘述的方式來表達我認為是OK的,但在文章中並未對 Business Administration多做著墨,這篇的內容比較偏向於在說作者的求學辛路歷程,可能會較與本文主題不夠多關聯。
B.印象中,美式作文是偏向破題法,故主題句應該再明確且有力一點比較好。
C.我覺得,此篇文章有點缺少開頭的感覺,也就是說,第一段到第三段應該都屬於本文的部分(即使主要是在說求學的辛路歷程),沒有一個引導的開始,會讓人感覺有點突兀。
D.結論方面應該要整合一下整篇文章,與第一段前後呼應,力量有點不夠強。

Nancy said...

文欣同學已經很大略的把一些問題都有提出來了,在此我再提供一些小建議:
此篇文章的結構是前三段為原因,最後一段為結論。但整體看下來,感覺和主題(為什麼讀企管)較有呼應的是一、三段,關於第二段,可以再朝較有力且與選讀企管的原因加強一下。
註:對於你的轉學考歷程,真是令人深深的感到辛苦與可惜。但台科大也真的是還不錯的學校吧?嘻^^

Nancy said...

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